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Kunjal said:
moved us from a positive begining to a tragic end
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# 2 October 2009 at 1:48 pm

ste said:
yes..for time being i thought something was good bt to realize that it turned out to be a disaster for her..:)
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# 2 October 2009 at 2:01 pm

Anwesa said:
I think the story could have been a better read with more pauses. I’m personally more fond of short sentences. A good attempt!! I loved the sting in the tale.
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# 2 October 2009 at 4:54 pm

Hemanth Potluri said:
i was actually looking for the positive ending but ended up tragic…
urs..hemu..
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# 2 October 2009 at 6:17 pm

Aniket said:
Echo to Anwesa. Short sentences give words more meaning and pauses help reader fill in the gaps himself.
However, that takes nothing away from your story plot that definitely moves the reader.
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# 3 October 2009 at 10:20 am

zahid said:
The best line of this 55 fiction is ‘She was given 3 months’ which was brought out slowly with good usage of Blood !!!
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# 3 October 2009 at 11:03 pm

Rajlakshmi said:
The ending makes one to think abt life and death.. Heartfelt write.. Just to think that the smile wont last long..
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# 4 October 2009 at 4:06 pm

The Colors Magazine (author) said:
That was a sad one, very painful to know that someone you love won’t stay with you for long.
It is a good story, but I know you can do better, I read better ones from you.
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# 13 October 2009 at 3:36 pm

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