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Postmortem: 55 Fiction

4 October 2009 90 Comments

Contest Entry #35: Postmortem

Amanda was lying on the postmortem table and her body ripped open. The corpse’s foul odour soaked in ethanol was shearing the intestines devastatingly through the nostrils. The doctors were flummoxed on the brutal cold blooded murder case. They couldn’t find the clue.
Joe said, “I found it”
“What??”
“Can’t tell now, 55 words reached.”

The author, Kalyan Varadarajan (Chennai (India)), about himself: I’m an engineering graduate from Electrical and Electronics Engineering discipline, currently working as a Senior Systems Engineer in a software firm. I’ve a great passion for writing and Internet. Music and Internet has been my pass time all these days. I have great interest in cryptography, Web Designing, Poster Designing and Blogging.
Kalyan is blogging at http://kalyanb4u.wordpress.com

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  • Hemanth Potluri said:

    i am curious now :)…well waiting for the next 55 words :)..

    urs..hemu..

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 6:59 am

    Thanks Hemu…

    Yea I’ll come up with some more of it. You can check my blog to read few…

    Kally

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    # 4 October 2009 at 8:43 pm
  • Rajlakshmi said:

    Now that was somekind of ending hehe u left me curious.. Unique way to leave readers in suspense :) well narrated.

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 7:02 am

    Thanks Rajlakshmi :-)

    Yea its one of the kind of 55 Fiction !!!

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    # 4 October 2009 at 8:53 pm
  • Winnie the poohi said:

    Funny! but kinda not a story!

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 7:04 am

    Thanks Winnie

    but in the end it will leave you in thoughts….!! a contradiction !!

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    # 4 October 2009 at 10:01 pm
  • Muthu said:

    Wat a twisting Tale! :)

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 7:06 am

    Thanks Muthu !! :-)

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    # 5 October 2009 at 7:15 am
  • Sarabu said:

    twist in 55 words? i want to know it

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 7:08 am

    hehe yea..its a twist in the last line…u wud expect an answer which will unveil the clue. but u wudn’t have expected a “55 words Reached” answer from a doctor !! :-)

    Thats a twist !!!

    Thanks for your time !!

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    # 5 October 2009 at 7:24 am
  • Jaya said:

    Really a good one ! :)

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 7:11 am

    Thanks Jaya !!!

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    # 5 October 2009 at 7:25 am
  • Sudarshan said:

    Hii Kalyan .. This is like a spring that ends before it starts .
    Waiting to read more of this . Dont make it a Drop release :-)

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 7:13 am

    Thanks Sudarshan :-)

    I’m glad that u related this to - //This is like a spring that ends before it starts

    Sure I’ll make this an ocean !!! :-D

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    # 5 October 2009 at 7:27 am
  • Kevin said:

    Cool!! You’ve managed to make something intriguing and with suspense in 55!! Liked it :)

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 7:14 am

    Thanks a lot Kevin :-)

    I’m really glad hearing these words from u!!!

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    # 5 October 2009 at 8:15 am
  • Prats said:

    huh !! kinda left me disappointed .. what’s a story without a proper end ?

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 7:18 am

    Sorry for disappointing u..but this is how it is to be….if I had given some answer, it wud have been a normal story…thats y…there is a twist at the end !! :-D

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    # 5 October 2009 at 2:33 pm
  • Kishore said:

    Kally,

    That was a great suspense dude… its like our mega serial, with breaks at the most unexpected time!!! Will you break the truth in d next episode?? :)

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 7:19 am

    hehe Thanks Kishore !! :-)

    //its like our mega serial, with breaks at the most unexpected time!!

    yea it is like that !!

    Sure I’ll break in another 55 fiction !!

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    # 5 October 2009 at 8:43 pm
  • Sree said:

    Suspense again..!!!
    That too in just 55 words..!!
    Amazing..Well done Kalyan.
    Waiting for the next 55.. :-)

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 7:21 am

    Thanks Sree :-)

    Yeasure I’ll post more of such thing in my blog.

    Do throw a visit to my blog :)

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    # 5 October 2009 at 9:07 pm
  • Arun said:

    Sounds odd!!!!

    when shall we expect the rest??!!! :P

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 8:21 pm

    hehe :-)

    Yea it sounds odd !! and thats wat it is all about :-D

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    # 6 October 2009 at 7:08 am
  • Joseph Selwin said:

    I am afraid if the author knows the clue!!! good start

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 8:22 pm

    Thanks Joseph !!

    The author knows the clue and that leaves the story in suspense !!!

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    # 6 October 2009 at 7:10 am
  • Dinesh said:

    hi!!!!!!!!!!
    thats awesome …… what a great suspense that too in 3 lines :) very good narration with beguiling lexis makes it pretty more anxious.. waiting for the next post……!!!!!!!

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 8:23 pm

    Thanks Dinesh !!! :-)

    Yea will post more….u cancheck my blog !! :-)

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    # 6 October 2009 at 7:12 am
  • Delphia said:

    Can you pls. extend ur 55 words…too curious to wait for next 55…good attempt Kally… :)

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 8:25 pm

    Thanks Delphia !!! :-)

    I’m afraid I’ll not be able to extend this….coz it has to be in 55…..as per ur wish I’ll come up with more of this kind !!

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    # 6 October 2009 at 7:16 am
  • Sarada KV said:

    Hey Kally..Just awesome! i am not holding any contest.. Let me know how she was murdered!No words to express your writing skills yaar!

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 8:26 pm

    Thanks a lotttttttttt Sarada :-)

    Sure I’ll let you know how she was murdered !! :P

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    # 6 October 2009 at 1:18 pm
  • Sundaramurthi said:

    This brings me into the suspense world and keep me there until, “the end”. Excellent!

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 8:28 pm

    Thanks Sundar for your comments !! :-)

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    # 6 October 2009 at 4:34 pm
  • Gleenn said:

    this is great mix of suspense and humor. The last sentence revealed the complete resolution. :) I enjoyed this story.

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 8:29 pm

    hehe :-)

    Thanks Gleen. I’m glad that you enjoyed the story !!!!

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    # 6 October 2009 at 5:32 pm
  • Abdul Kadar said:

    Nice work buddy!

    A fine start but has left everyone disappointed. let me know when u update it… :)

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 8:59 pm

    Thanks Abdul…I’ll update u surely on this one…!! :)

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    # 6 October 2009 at 8:46 pm
  • Madhu said:

    So I am curious now I want to know wat is the end of this story. Please mail me the end to my mail ID-madhusetty85@yahoo.com

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    Kally Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 9:05 pm

    hehe.. :-)

    I can understand the curiosity !!! I shud think of a different ending for you. Well Madhu I’ll update you..hehe :P

    Thanks !!

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    # 6 October 2009 at 8:54 pm
  • Srinath said:

    Hey Kally… This is my first comment for any kind of write up i have read!!! and that was because the way u have narrated the short story and left a huge suspense behind it!! jus wondering y did the contest was a 55 Word one… The way u have written, i hpe it shoud have been more than 200 word contest.. please unveil the suspense soon!! cant wait any more~!

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 4:08 am

    Thanks Srinath !! :-)

    hehe :-) leaving u ppl in suspense was the intention.

    Anyways, I’ll write a big story based on this in detail as u wanted :-D

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    # 6 October 2009 at 9:17 pm
  • saravanakumar said:

    Hi Kalyan,

    Really it is very suspensive. But I feel that you have wasted the last six words. Because the story stopped immediately after a good start.
    Expecting the continuation at the same level of suspense.

    Best wishes,
    Saravana.

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 4:10 am

    Thanks Saravana,

    I did not waste it actually. I ended up with creating a suspense in the story !!!!

    I’ll continue writing 55 fictions. Check my website :-)

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    # 6 October 2009 at 9:29 pm
  • Karisma said:

    You have started off well, i was so curious to know what happened.
    Alas! u reached the max of words.. ufff

    nice tactics :)
    wish the words cud have been 5555 than 55 :)

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 4:11 am

    Thanks a lot Karisma !!! :-)

    5555 words?? Woooooooow that will become a Novel !!! :O

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    # 6 October 2009 at 10:02 pm
  • yeshu said:

    Hey,
    That was a cool one. i guess 55 fiction is in ur blood, hehe…!
    i thought something else wud happen. coz amanda is supposed to be the corpse and she’s not supposed to be thinking anythin. . . so when u started off with amanda as the protagonist, i dint quite expect this sort of an end..
    anyways, gud one dude :)
    cheers!

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 4:13 am

    Thanks Yeshu :-)

    //i guess 55 fiction is in ur blood

    woooow…I guess I still have to improve. But Thnx for this one :-)

    The end is actually a twist and it is unexpected one as I wanted :)

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    # 6 October 2009 at 10:57 pm
  • Arun said:

    Kalyan,

    It was abstract. But it was good. A good way to incite curiosity in all your followers.
    Keep it going man.

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 4:44 pm

    Thanks Arun :)

    Yea I’ll write more !! :-)

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    # 7 October 2009 at 3:56 am
  • Anusha said:

    Hey Kalyan

    That was a wonderful 55 Fiction.

    The climax was quite tricky…..it leaves people in suspense towards the end. You have done it !!!

    Again you have shown ur writing skills !!

    Keep writing

    Thanks
    Anusha

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 4:46 pm

    Thanks Anusha :-)

    I guess, you loved my story a lot..!! :)

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    # 7 October 2009 at 4:16 am
  • Varadu said:

    Hey Kalyan

    Your piece of writing has always been gud and this 55 Fiction also has turned out to be great. I liked to ending, merging the 55 word limit in the story and the plot, I guess no one has done this before.

    Good Job as usual…..

    Regards,
    Varadu

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 4:47 pm

    Thanks Varadu :-)

    I’m glad that you liked my ending :-)

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    # 7 October 2009 at 4:57 am
  • Sumitha said:

    Hi Kalyan

    I’ve been reading all your stories and articles in ur blog. I liked this one too. I expected the doctor to unveil the secret. But by telling “55 words reached” he kept all the audience in suspense. the end was unexpected. I’ve not tried my hands on 55 fiction yet. But I’ve to learn from you all.

    Good Work. Keep writing.

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 4:50 pm

    Thanks Sumi

    I’m really happy that, you read all my stories…All the Best 2 u too. Try ur hands on it and let me know :-)

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    # 7 October 2009 at 6:47 am
  • Dinesh Kalyan said:

    Hi Kally

    This piece of 55 Fiction is simply superb. You have maintained the thrill and suspense till the end. I did not expect the “55 words Reached” answer from a Doctor. It was funny and thrilling.

    You can write more of this kind. I love reading it. Expecting more of 55 fictions from you.

    Keep writing !! :-)

    Dinesh Kalyan

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 4:51 pm

    Thanks Dinesh for ur encouraging words :-)

    you can check out my blog to read more of my stories

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    # 7 October 2009 at 6:54 am
  • Vinoth Kumar said:

    Hey

    That was really awesome. Different than the other 55 fictions you wrote before. This was thrilling and creepy (I shud say creepy??..corpse, post mortem n all…??). Anyways I enjoyed reading it. Keep this going Kalyan. All the best.

    Vinoth

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 4:58 pm

    Thanks Vinoth!!!!

    hehe..yea u can’t say creepy n all…mmmm..since it doesn’t involve any ghosts, or paranormal things…anyways I’m happy abt u reading the post :-)

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    # 7 October 2009 at 6:57 am
  • MohanaKrishnan said:

    Hey kally,
    “Can’t tell now, 55 words reached.”/That was too cunning abt the ending!;)!
    but was a good read… all the best!:)

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 4:59 pm

    Thanks Mohan :)

    hehe..cunning is it?…:D

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    # 7 October 2009 at 7:07 am
  • shobana said:

    hai kalyan!!!
    good try!!!i think u made all the readers wonder wat will b the climax tat 2 in 55 words…it really ur talent 2 write such story..i was never fond of triller story but now i want 2 knw watz the end of this story…u used 2 think like this while sitting alone???great yar keep it up$$$$get company soon 2 write a romatic story next time!!!:)all the best for the upcoming climax

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 8:19 pm

    Thnx Shobana :-)

    //u used 2 think like this while sitting alone???

    yea..wrote this after thinking in solitude….

    //get company soon 2 write a romantic story next time!

    yea sure…..I’ll write one romantic story for sure :D

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    # 7 October 2009 at 9:00 am
  • Sangfroid said:

    LOL!! Great build up but a nonsensical let down in the end.

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 8:20 pm

    hehe…Thnx a lot Sangfroid :-)

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    # 7 October 2009 at 2:38 pm
  • Kunjal said:

    obviously we are curious:) Leena if you are hearing please announce another contest with no wordlimits:)

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 8:23 pm

    Thanks Kunjal for ur words :-)

    I guess Leena will be very much happy to conduct another contest as u wished !!!

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    # 7 October 2009 at 2:44 pm
  • lakshmi said:

    they say suspense kills!!!! this one does for sure kalyan!!! ;) A novel nano-novel i must say!!! good try, keep going

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    Kally Reply:
    October 7th, 2009 at 9:12 pm

    Thanks Lakshmi :-)

    Yea this much of suspense had killed her ;)

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    # 7 October 2009 at 8:41 pm
  • Rengarajan said:

    This is really a twisting tale… We are reading a story and suddenly we find us inside the very story!

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    Kally Reply:
    October 8th, 2009 at 7:27 am

    Thanks Rengarajan :) for ur words here !!

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    # 7 October 2009 at 9:34 pm
  • Danny said:

    Its really good! I think I need more than 55 words to comment on this story!
    The twist in the story is directed towards the readers…

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    Kally Reply:
    October 8th, 2009 at 7:28 am

    Thanks Danny :-)

    you can comment in more than 55 words :D

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    # 7 October 2009 at 9:55 pm
  • Raghuram said:

    A thriller can never start better than this- in a mortuary! Kalyan, Kindly complete this and put it in ur blog!! Thanks.. Really nice..

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    Kally Reply:
    October 8th, 2009 at 7:29 am

    Thanks a lot Raghuram !!!

    Yea will write a story based on this and will put it in my blog :)

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    # 7 October 2009 at 10:00 pm
  • Akshat said:

    OKKKKKKKK

    Now that was so not expected!!! The climax…or more like anti-climax was pure genius…..unique…but this was so not how it should have been….but then again, if you had written the whole story…then it would be just another story….and so many people would not have been forced to comment!!

    Is it fair??…umm…..though it was out of the blue…but you still took a risk….and it paid…kind of!!! :D

    umm…not the best ( surely in the top 3) according to me….but the pure genius deserves a kudos !!!

    Best Of Lucck!!!!

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    Kally Reply:
    October 8th, 2009 at 12:00 pm

    hehe Thanks for dropping in Akshat :-)

    and for ur words…yea it is quite a risky one. coz the end was defenitely unexpected :-D

    But still I wanted to try something different. So this was my outcome :)

    Anyways, Thnx for the Kudos !!!!

    Kally

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    # 7 October 2009 at 11:25 pm
  • Jayakumar said:

    i am curious now …… tell wat happens next

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    Kally Reply:
    October 8th, 2009 at 12:01 pm

    Sure Jayakumar :-)

    I’ll let you know what happened in case I write a atory based on this in my blog. Do check out my blog :-)

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    # 8 October 2009 at 7:25 am
  • Ashok said:

    Good suspense…
    Is 55 words enought to create curiosity? Yes, Kally does it.

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    Kally Reply:
    October 10th, 2009 at 2:38 pm

    Thanks Ashok :-)

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    # 8 October 2009 at 5:00 pm
  • sathyan said:

    I don’t like this story ,but its ok ,a bit thrilling but not seem to be interesting for 55 words to read those.u need to improve Mr Kalyan

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    Kally Reply:
    October 10th, 2009 at 2:57 pm

    Thanks !! I’ll improve upon things !! :)

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    # 9 October 2009 at 4:10 pm
  • The Colors Magazine (author) said:

    Will you finally tell us what happened after 55 words? You cannot make so many people wait, right?

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    Kally Reply:
    October 13th, 2009 at 8:35 pm

    Sure Lena….

    I’ve to come up with a some Short story with that and I’ll let you all know !! :)

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    # 13 October 2009 at 4:57 pm
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  • Priyanka said:

    Oh!! This wasnt the least expected one!!!! Kally, wat next???

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    # 18 October 2009 at 2:28 pm
  • vinothbabu said:

    machaan……..
    year 2012:
    sujatha wrote sum gud 55 fictions in tamil……..
    kalyan wrote sum gud 55 fictions in english……..
    unxpected. . .
    gud one
    xpecting more
    keep it up……

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    # 24 October 2009 at 6:42 pm
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