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Fast: 55 Fiction

2 October 2009 10 Comments

Contest entry #4: Fast

Their lips locked. Full and tender lips, he thought. He could sense her heartbeats on his chest and fingers rolling over his hair. Placing his hands on her waist, 32 maybe, he thought. He moved his palm upwards from waistline. Is it fast, he thought and then slowed? She broke her kiss.

She said, “Fast”

The author about himself: Vinayak Mohanlal. Apart from what I do for a living am an aspiring writer love to write and read. I basically write fiction based on true emotions and situations.

Pen Name     - Vinz
Blog                -  ScRiBbLeSzZ
URL                -  www.vinumohanlal.blogspot.com

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10 Comments »

  • Kunjal said:

    well built romantic scene in just 55 words :)

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    # 2 October 2009 at 2:02 pm
  • ste said:

    yes…it reminds me of my fiction stories….nicely described nd it made me smile :)

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    # 2 October 2009 at 2:17 pm
  • AJai said:

    I could so relate to it… he he. Liked this.

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    # 2 October 2009 at 4:42 pm
  • Hemanth Potluri said:

    romance built up so fast in 55 words ..so nice bro :)…

    urs..hemu..

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    # 2 October 2009 at 5:50 pm
  • Geraldine said:

    Nice one! Romantic and playful.

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    # 2 October 2009 at 8:36 pm
  • Aniket said:

    A man’s gotta do, what a man’s gotta do. Right? :D
    It sure made me smile. :P

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    # 3 October 2009 at 9:59 am
  • zahid said:

    Well, this is 55 Fast Fiction. The best line here is surely ‘ She said “Fast”‘ Other than that we have this ‘32 maybe, he thought’ which is a minute detail not so easy to include in a nano story.

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    # 3 October 2009 at 8:17 pm
  • Rajlakshmi said:

    Romantic ehh!! :) loved the ending

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    # 4 October 2009 at 5:16 pm
  • Sangfroid said:

    Well, assumptions could slow things up. But this was real fast :-)

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    # 7 October 2009 at 3:07 pm
  • The Colors Magazine (author) said:

    It was cute actually, like Geraldine said - playful, totally agree with this.

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    # 13 October 2009 at 3:29 pm

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