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Epic Rivalry: 55 Fiction

3 October 2009 23 Comments

Contest Entry #19: Epic Rivalry

“It’s my turn.” She pushed him.

“It’s ALWAYS your turn.” He wrestled.

“Well, I am the older one.”

“And I, am the smarter.”

“Go ahead smarty! Remember, mom gave ME the money.”

“Alright, you pick. Anything but Strawberry!”

She sported her best smile as she turned to the counter, “One Strawberry Sundae please.”

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  • Akshat said:

    ..that describes the epic rivalry in its true color!!!

    Sibling rivalry……love it…….well i am still 16 and love to fight with me elder brother for everything!!!

    A good read!!!…

    Best Of Luck…..for the contest!!

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    Aniket Reply:
    October 3rd, 2009 at 2:26 pm

    Thank you! The fights with my sister and elder brother are the fondest memories I have of growing up.

    Am so glad you could relate to it.

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    # 3 October 2009 at 2:04 pm
  • Anwesa said:

    i loved it for its innocence and exuberance.

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    Aniket Reply:
    October 3rd, 2009 at 2:27 pm

    Thanks a lot!

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    Aniket Reply:
    October 3rd, 2009 at 2:45 pm

    Thanks a lot! :)

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    # 3 October 2009 at 2:07 pm
  • Hope said:

    Oh! I can relate to it 100% me n my big brother and those childhood days :) lovely!!

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    Aniket Reply:
    October 4th, 2009 at 6:40 pm

    Am glad this brought back some cherished memories! :D

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    # 3 October 2009 at 4:34 pm
  • Kunjal said:

    well done:)seems you have poured in your heart here:)

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    Aniket Reply:
    October 4th, 2009 at 6:42 pm

    Thanks for such a lovely comment!

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    # 3 October 2009 at 8:37 pm
  • zahid said:

    Ah !!! The Sho Shweet 55 Fiction. I have always been very very fond of these tiny brother-sister stories. (i haven’t a sister though).

    And aniket seems like i’m the only one to have used babies in the story and not kill them. :P

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    Aniket Reply:
    October 4th, 2009 at 6:44 pm

    I too have a Nick & Jenny series going over at my blog. And I too do not have a sister. I have a few cousins am real close too and am quite fond of. They are quite a handful. :P

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    # 4 October 2009 at 12:04 am
  • Hemanth Potluri said:

    i remembered all my memories with my sweet sis…lovely write up :)..

    urs..hemu..

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    Aniket Reply:
    October 4th, 2009 at 6:45 pm

    Am so glad that you did. Then as an author I’ll consider my job well done. Thanks a lot.

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    # 4 October 2009 at 12:12 pm
  • Zahid said:

    I was also wondering why strawberry is the most unpreferred icecream flavour all over !!!

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    Aniket Reply:
    October 5th, 2009 at 10:40 am

    My point exactly! But its hard to contest this theory with women.

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    # 4 October 2009 at 9:51 pm
  • Winnie the poohi said:

    How kewt! You just described me n my sis! Left me with a smile .. a wide grin!!

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    Aniket Reply:
    October 5th, 2009 at 10:42 am

    :D :D Ain’t I glad for that? :P Thanks.

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    # 4 October 2009 at 10:23 pm
  • Gleenn said:

    oh, glad I’m the first born and I always had it in my terms. lol. Although things changed when siblings grew up. very realistic.

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    Aniket Reply:
    October 6th, 2009 at 2:59 pm

    Well am the younger one so goes without saying you are one from the enemy clan. But I’ll take the appreciation anyway. :D

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    # 5 October 2009 at 11:32 am
  • pjd said:

    Ha ha, well done Aniket. A charming vignette.

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    # 6 October 2009 at 10:51 pm
  • Amity Me said:

    Aniket,

    it’s a typical example of sibling rivalry…but the younger always wins, isn’t it?

    cute story boy…

    :)

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    # 7 October 2009 at 10:04 am
  • Sangfroid said:

    Very well depicted. Captures the true essence. Kudos! :-)

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    # 7 October 2009 at 2:52 pm
  • The Colors Magazine (author) said:

    That was so cute, I loved it the moment I read it. You are a master in creating such scenes :)

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    # 13 October 2009 at 4:05 pm

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